Wednesday, April 2, 2014

Thursday Taster, April 3, 2014 ~ The Little Mermaid: An Erotic Adaptation

Hello, my friends. It has been awhile since I have been able to participate. Today I hope to entertain you (long-winded tho I am, my apologies) with a piece that has been accepted for a Fairytale Anthology at Ravenous Romance. It topped out at about 7700 words, so this is a wee Taster of the set up. As you know, The Little Mermaid was written by Hans Christian Anderson in 1836. It speaks of a coming of age Princess Ariel who lived....

"Once upon a time, far across the land and as long across sea as the eye could behold, where the deep turquoise waters met the sky of blue, the water was so deep, so very, very deep. As certain as butterflies kissed fragrant petals and birds flitted from branch to branch amongst the trees in the clouds above, there were creatures that made their homes in the cool secret shadowed hollows where ocean plants stretched towards the light and danced pliantly with a shift in current or the brush of a passing fish, both large and small.
In the deepest concave of the clear azure waters was a beautiful castle, fit for the Royal Family. The castle was big and expansive with walls of coral and spires of conch shells. The roof was made of elegant oyster shells that opened and closed with the ocean currents baring the glittering jeweled pearls snuggled inside, fit for the crown of a Queen. The arched Gothic windows were made of colored sea glass gathered before the royal wedding. The light flickered off of, and through, the beautiful colored glass to dance patterns across the castle floor of shells and abalone shards."


As beautiful as her world was, Princess Ariel longed for the world above the sea. "The little princess watched year after year as her sisters all reached their eighteenth year and rose to the ocean’s surface to see what treasures lived and were held above the palace below. Each year came and went and the five older sisters one-by-one returned from their journeys to the surface with wonderful stories of lights and towns, music and song, bells and fog horns, flocks of white swans that flew across the sky together like a white trail of wedding lace. Five long years she waited to reach her eighteenth year; finally, it arrived. Her grand-mother declared the day and said she would prepare her for her journey to the surface as she had her sisters who came before."

Today was her eighteenth birthday, her day to rise to the surface of the depths. She would see a handsome Prince celebrating his twentieth birthday, fall in love and save him in the wicked throes of a violent storm that distroys his ship and all who sail her.

If you enjoy my Taster, and do so hope you do, please leave me a comment below before you wander to my Talented Taster  friends pages to read their excerpts. You may find them at the link or listed one-by-one like beautiful pearls mounted on feather lite petals from sea roses. Enjoy your dip! xo

The Little Mermaid
An Erotic Adaptation
by
Muffy Wilson

The ship yawned and groaned; planks moaned while someone called out for "God". Alarmed, the young princess grew scared for all aboard the ship as she stayed alert to avoid being hurt herself. At once, the rising fierce sea raised a foam curled wave over the ship, breaking the center mast, sending all who sailed her into the sea and she lost sight of her prince. The violent seas were perilous to the princess herself, so as she looked for him, she had to mind the furling waves tossing debris, trunks, ropes, planks and bodies in the curling masses to her front. When the center mast broke like a twig, the furious wind brought it down on the middle deck breaking the ship in two up-ended halves, pitching everything into the gapping darkness of sea. 

Frantically, the little princess searched the shifting wreckage for her prince, with care to her own well-being and safety. When she finally spied him, his beautiful black eyes were closed; his arms and legs, now weaken by the fight for survival, could not bear his weight and he drifted slowly to the depths below. She thought happily for a moment that her future was insured now and they could live forever in the watery palace below. In her dreamy pursuit to join the prince, she suddenly remembered the many stories she begged of her Grand-Mama: humans could not live in their world beneath the air they needed to thrive. A human, the Prince, would die if brought to the watery palace, no matter the love that may join them. Without a thought to her safety amongst the wreckage, she swam with might, dodging the remains of the great ship, to the drowning prince and breathed the air in her lungs into his with a kiss. She then held his head as they stretched to break the surface and to find safety amid the crags and reefs. 

She prayed, begged tearfully to the Lord God Nautilus to return the Prince to her as she breathed her life into him. But, it was not the Lord God Nautilus who witnessed her prayer but Hermione, Queen of the Saltwater Sirens, a water witch and fallen court confident to the Queen Wife of the Sea King, with magical powers she often used for good and evil at her whim. Hermione stayed back in the dark recesses of the night, rode the folds of the waves and watched as the little mermaid tended the human. Not yet decided to help the little mermaid or take this young human male for herself, she observed in quiet solitude as the mermaid tried to save the young man. 

Soon overcome with exhaustion, the little mermaid fell into a deep sleep on the smooth, bare chest of her love. Hermione watched as they drifted into a deep slumber. Hermione swam closer quite silently to examine the two and realized the little mermaid was Princess Ariel, youngest daughter to the Sea King, a powerful majesty and formidable adversary. She did not recognize the young human male, but what adorned his person still were gold rings and necklaces with emeralds and rubies that glistened with wealth and power. She dare not run afoul of these two royal charters, if she valued her own fortunes. She would need to think on this and so she departed while they slept.

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And so, I leave you as Hermione plots to separate the soon to be young lovers to exact her revenge upon her rival the Sea King, Princess Ariel's royal father and Monarch of the Sea. Hermione is hoping to plunge the lovers both to their most certain deaths.


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14 comments :

  1. You are delightful and delicious in your prose. I am so jealous!

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    1. Pres, you are such a Peach. I so appreciate that you indulge me. Thank you, darling <3 xo

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  2. Okay that was absolutely captivating!

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    1. Thank you for wading through it all the way. I appreciate it <3 xo

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  3. Wonderful Taster. Your visuals painted the perfect picture of a young mermaid struggling with her emotions as she prays for the safety of a young prince. Excellent! So good to see your return <3

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    1. Naoim, my BFF, you are always so supportive and I appreciate your comments and instructive help. You and Michael read thru the whole thing to catch what didn't work and her you are, reading it again. That is a real love <3 xo

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  4. Rereading this work of art brought me more pleasure than my first read. I know how happy the end is with all the miraculous prose you deliver. When do you submit it? My best wishes for a great review and acceptance.

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    1. Darling, Pablo....I submitted last month. I wrote this in 3 afternoons and.was accepted right away. Thank you my sweet friend. You were a big part, along with Naomi, catching the things that didn't work. I am so glad you enjoyed the second read more than the first, but oc course, YOU know the ending. xo

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  5. What a fantastic work of so amazing story of Tragedy Of Man , You have proved your worth and ability a great writer must have . Really man s struggle with Land sea and super powers for centuries depicted in wonderful prose , Loved it .Congrats Muffy Ji

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    1. Thank you, Jail Ji. I can always know you will read my work. I so appreciate that you give me you attention and time <3 xo

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  6. I love this - some exquisite writing, combining the original fairytale's sense of childhood wonder with a more adult sensibility. Tenderly crafted prose, Muffy. You've been missed. Welcome back.

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    1. Thank you so much, Jake. Your opinion means a great deal to me as I so appreciate your crafty and creative writing. You are kind to welcome me back. All is done on the home front and the offspring have been sent back to their own homes <3 xo

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  7. You're creating a very magical world here. Terrific writing, quite lyrical in places.

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  8. Another wonderful story from a beautiful wordsmith. Muffy, I adore you. You put words together in a beautiful and fascinating way, and few writers can create the atmosphere and lyrical sense of image that you appear to achieve effortlessly.

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